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 Clink Open in new Window. [E]
Clink, Dutchman''s entry
by SeanFhear Author Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings!

I found this on the Random Read and Review button.

What an interesting way of driving home a sense of heartbreak and despair. It sets forth an onomatopoeia, repeating the "clink" until we see both a shattered heart and the carelessness of those who shattered it. Clinking of glasses and casual laughter show us the contrast of feelings and hint at manipulation under the surface, while leaving most things unexplained. It paints a picture both haunting and brief, lingering after the last words are gone.

I might recommend using the final sound, "core," somewhere else within the poem, as it comes in suddenly and leaves us wondering where it was before. Also, adding {size:4}{font:Verdana} at the beginning goes a long way to creating a clearer, more professional presentation on the page. And I always recommend adding three relevant genres to an item to ensure people can find it when browsing. You can try Philosophy, Drama, Emotional, Personal, Experience, Dark, Relationship, Experience, Folklore, etc. Almost anything will do.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *WingL**Heartv**WingR*


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