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 The Stern Man with a Soft Heart Open in new Window. [E]
Friends, here is a sweet tale for children. Hope you like it. Thanks.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings, dear sir, and welcome to writing.com!

Your writing bursts with an irresistible love for nature and humankind. I was delighted to read this heartwarming story about kids and fruit trees and the lesson of kindness. It's lovely to read aloud to children for several reasons. The Indian cultural setting is charmingly organic and uncontrived, as you write what is natural to you, and becomes a wonderful educational opportunity for kids (and grownups) from around the world.

I love the theme, which is universal and memorable. A burly guard with a soft heart and a family, learning to share the bounty of the earth with those who appreciate it the most: who could argue with such a gentle and amusing tale? It counts as a "cozy story," which is a genre considered for grownups that's gaining popularity these days as people seek comfort in a world of difficulty and sorrow. You write vividly, with clear images and description that doesn't bog us down.

I see you are learning how to use the three genres to your advantage; that's great! Has anyone told you the three relevant genres gives you more opportunities to be nominated for our annual Quill Awards? Check out the portfolio of Jeff-o'-lantern 🎃 Author Icon or Lilli Munster 🦇 ☕ Author Icon for any further info on those *Delight* I see also you are using the proprietary markup language to enlarge your font, which is always greatly appreciated. Read all about the wonderful things you can do with our WML by opening Writing.com Tools on the left sidebar and then clicking on WritingML: Docs and Help.

I would suggest centering your three asterisk scene dividers by using {center}***{/center}... Also, if you would like to make the item more fun and engaging visually for kids, you can visit https://en.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_emoticons and choose some adorably relevant emojis to copy paste as scene dividers, the way I did with the squirrel story you kindly reviewed. It's a touch of cute that works with some types of stories.

I can't think of anything substantial to suggest for your writing improvement. You may want to try entering "Senior Center Forum" Open in new Window., as I know the hostess would love your work, but I have to warn you she's quite backlogged the past few months.

Take care, thanks for sharing your positivity with us, and by all means keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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