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 Inner Turmoil Open in new Window. [E]
I wonder about all the things l am not aware of
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

A poem that expresses caution about the unknown.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

There's nice spiritual undertones in the poem that resonates with me as a reader.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free poem with no apparent rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "The Unknown is my helmsman, My deliverance!" There's a lot packed in this line. First, the unusual capitalization of Unknown. Taken in context with the rest of the poem, I personally interpreted the Divine, and if I do, then the rest of the line, rings poignant and true. There's a lot of reverence in the line, if read quickly, might be overlooked.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening evokes curiosity as the reader sails on a raft in the river of life. This curiosity keeps the reader invested. The title is reflective of the theme contained in the poem. A poignant poem that resonates with the soul.

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