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 The Watch Open in new Window. [13+]
The story of a poignant Christmas gift. 628 words
by Hang the Christmas Sox Author Icon
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Review of The Watch  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE STORY

Tommy wants a new watch for Christmas.

*Smile*WHAT I LIKED

I liked the ending. While sad, it gave Tommy a happy memory.

*Star* POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person limited from Tommy's perspective. Past tense is used in the story.

*Star*DIALOGUE

The dialogue accents the narration.

*Star*OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph sets the scene in a dramatic fashion.


*Star*CHARACTERS

Tommy comes across as sincere and genuine young man and will resonate with readers.

*Star*FLOW & PACING

The opening set up the dilemma, and ending provided an adequate emotional conclusion.

*Star*MECHANICS

I did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star*PARTING THOUGHTS

The title fits the story which is succinct and to the point. A heartbreaking story that will leave the reader misty eyed.

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