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Met a couple from UK, amazing folks who brings healing through laughter. Jane and Mark.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

A charming poem about a couple that works well together.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the beat of the poem. It captured that lightheartedness of the couple.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form with a mixed rhyming pattern. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and add color. Makes the poem easier to read on WDC.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "We stand in the middle, beneath the same skies." It's an easy picture, two people standing together, but the use of the middle implies they see each other as equals, taking on the same adventure of life together. There's a lot of warmhearted overtones here.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening invites the reader down to the coast and keeps them reading as the reader wants to find out what will happen next. The title is reflective of the poem. I enjoyed the lighthearted characterization of the poem.

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