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 | The Art of Office Chaos - 647 Words  [E] How to get your dream job even if your current boss doesn't want you to leave.  |
| (4.0)  A review from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  First Impressions: I can’t blame Becca for taking some rather unusual steps to reach her goal. After all, her boss hadn’t played fair either. It seemed that Loreen was a real piece of work, not only sabotaging her employee’s chances at getting a job offer in a different department but openly smiling and how clever she was, keeping Becca in a job she didn’t like. She was also full of contradictions, on the one hand not wanting to let Becca go because she was good at her job, and then telling her to her face that she wasn’t cut out for data processing. That’s the kind of nightmare boss we all dread.  Suggestions: The story was well written and I didn’t notice any technical errors. I wasn’t sure if all the prompt words and phrases completely fit though. You used them correctly in a sentence, but what was the purpose of her putting the chunk of chocolate on her desk? I expected it to be the place where her boss usually sat on the corner of her desk and ended up sitting on the chocolate, ruining her suit, or something along those lines, but it wasn’t mentioned again. I was also looking forward to the pranks continuing for a bit longer. There is plenty of other mayhem she could have caused, and at one point Becca smiled, knowing that this was just the beginning - but it was actually already the end of her trying to convince Loreen to let her go. I assume this was for the Cramp where the word limit is 1,000, so you could have let Becca come up with a couple more fun ideas. The other thing I wasn’t sure about was why she applied for a job in the Marketing Department when she wanted to work in Legal. Was this just a stepping stone to get her out of Loreen’s department because there was no opening in Legal? I think just a few words to explain might help here.  Final Thoughts: Those are just minor points though. I think it would be worth working on the issues to make the story a little smoother, but as it is, it’s a fun tale. Most readers will have come across a nasty boss at some point in their career and will be cheering for Becca, and you have created a character who is relatable and, to a point, likeable. I enjoyed the read!
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