Little Girl Lost

Not finished: something about it isn't right but I can't put my finger on it.

Little girl Lost

Little girls are told from birth:
You belong to your father above
and below on earth.
When you are a woman grown
the other half you’ll find.
He’ll take your had in marriage
and say you are mine.

Now my time has come and
my father’s hand is gone
but in it’s place is none.
The other never showed
I wasn’t given what I was owed.
So now my hand is cold
and my heart is feeling old.

Revision- a little better I think

Little girl Lost

Little girls are told from birth:
You belong to your father
above and below on earth.
When you are older
the other half you’ll find.
He’ll take your had in marriage
and say you are mine.

Now my time has come
my fathers hands are gone
Turns out my faith was dumb.
Everything I was told was wrong.
The other never showed
So now my hand is cold
I wasn’t given what I was owed.
My heart is feeling old.