Till' death may I part

This poem is meant to represent suicide attempts, please give an honest review.

Till' death may I part

How my heart longs for death
Oh, how I miss such lovely bliss
Trying and trying to get over with it
Failing once more to end everything
I decide to attempt once more, and lose
Reaching out to death like an old friend, I ask
"Oh death, how long must you take?"
"How long until I cease to wake?"
A familiar face starts to answer
But they hesitate.