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Hey guys I haven’t been on in a while and I’m not sure how this all works. I need people to give me a Honest review on my work so I know what to work on. Here is a sample of one of my writings let me know what you think.

Stuck in a dream

When I look up, the sky feels empty
So beautiful, so close, yet so far the feeling.
Fighting logic with imagination at a constant.
I take a path with no footprints,
Fearing something that is unknown.

When I look behind I already know the feelings.
My mind is slipping wanting to live in the past.
The pure thought of knowing what has already happened brings comfort.
The things I could change if I turned around and walked it again.
The fear of the unknown path, clouding my mind.

imagination takes me closer to the clouds,
reality wants to take the path I’ve already taken.
feelings like a never ending stair case, that Lead me to the clouds.

Will I ever reach the clouds or will I stay in a path, that I already taken?

When I get to the clouds and capture my dream, will I be content, or go on another adventure to reach what may be beyond the clouds?

How beautiful it would be to see the places that you will never see.
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Burning Boat, weren't you looking for folks who wanted honest reviews? Or was that someone else? I can't recall. lol

Duckie, since it's been a while, here's a quick refresher on tagging and posting links. *Bigsmile* Be sure you are using braces and not parentheses. *Wink*

{user:schnujo} *Right* Schnujo is Late to Lannister

{suser:schnujo} *Right* Schnujo is Late to Lannister

{huser:schnujo} *Right* Schnujo is Late to Lannister

To tag a person, you mouse over their handle to get their username, then use their username to tag them. In my case, my username and handle are usually the same, but many people often change their handle. The username is always the same, so that's why you use it to tag folks. *Wink*

To link to an item, you need the item number. If you've recently worked on it, it should automatically pop up after the colon (but there might be a delay if you have slow internet). If you are tagging another person's item or you haven't worked on it recently, you'll need to go to the item to get the item number. The number is in several places. In the main part of the port where everything is listed, the item number is on each item. If you open the item, it's below the title. If you have opened the item, the item number is also listed in the web address.

The 2 most common ways to link to an item are item and bitem (for big item).

I'll use my challenge as an example. *Bigsmile*

{item:2109126} *Right* "The Contest Challenge

{bitem:2109126} *Down*

The Contest Challenge  (13+)
Join by entering a contest a month for 12 months--Win Badges! Catching up is allowed!
#2109126 by Schnujo is Late to Lannister

I'm not much into reviewing, but hopefully you can get a few reviews. Try posting on Please Review under the Community tab on the left side. Good luck and welcome back! *Smile*
cold steel married to temple,
hard circle imprinted onto skin,
hands trembling,'
heart beating,
sweaty palms,
grip slipping
finger half a moon,
psychological seems physical,
light suddenly wants to turn to darkness,
realization no one here
thoughts go away
but my problems stay.
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