Well, now, I would appreciate a few opinions on this one before I dare post it to the "The Bard's Hall Contest" Cop Shop Mystery, 2023 edition. There is some stiff competition this month, and I need to step up my game. I managed to get the required 23 sentences and under a thousand words... but I need to know if it reads okay.
In 2012, as an Engineer, I was sent by the USAID to Mali, Africa, to help with a government project to build a new pumping station just north of the Niger River. But four months later, I was sent home in disgrace after refusing orders... not to get involved with the treatment of the local orphaned children.
My downfall started when I buried a boy of ten beside a dirt road. That story (initially written in 2015) is touched on in a revised short, "I Called Him Kicky" .
The anniversary of that tragedy is soon upon me, and the little boy's face haunts my dreams again. Thus, the reason for this revisit to old writings.
Later, in 2015, a contest using a prompt picture came up, and the following story sort of fell out of a sad little muse who visits me often. Another child I never got to touch or hold.
The days wain ever faster in my heart, and I revisited this poor little entry. I fixed a few commas and have reposted it anew. I share only to ease the haunting in my soul. Please don't be afraid to tell me how foolish old men can be. I truly would like to know what you think.
Okay, I managed to get an entry finished for "The Writer's Cramp" I think I even got it posted on how and where it is supposed to be. But then it only allows for 1000 words in this round. and those who know me, understand what a challenge with such constraints is to the likes of me...the current ranking member of the "L.W.A. on WDC"
Hee hee it's a Star Trek Prompt... what's not to like
A WDC birthday celebration. It sucks, (my entry, not the birthday thingy.) but what the hay... I did use two whole hours to compose it, well less the time to cook breakfast... thirty minutes but then, it is after all the spirit of competition we embrace is it not?
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