This is a really great story! Learning about the list in the beginning was a smart hook. The reader needed to keep reading in order to find out what was going to happen to the people on the list. I had no problem reading all the way through to find out because the piece was so easy to read. It is very clear and everything is well timed. The writing itself runs smoothly, so it's relaxing to read. I loved the ending it was a real surprise and very clever. You have accomplished a great deal in just a few words.
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