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Review by AndrewBlack
Rated: E | (3.0)
I always love writing that considers deeper issues through a more mundane lense. Thinking about a relationship via a game of Go Fish is great. I would recommend using some punctuation to get the reader to hear the lines the way you want them to. I've also learned over time that using words like 'Maybe' or 'Because' to start most lines can become a bit of a crutch, even if it fits stylistically. I still enjoyed the premise. Keep going!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoy a good description of the colour red. The way we think of it is really contradictory, one thing to represent love and anger. You’ve captured that quite well here. It’s always interesting to find a common thread between things that seem opposite on the surface.
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