|I chose to read your work because of your title. Not the word "Psycho", but the question mark is what appealed to me. Excellent choice when thousands of titles litter a screen (or book store.) It brings into question who really is mentally disturbed and who gets to decide?
What hit me the most was how you made your characters alive and interesting right down to the man who was missing his daughter's first words. At the end of your story I wanted to know the back story to every character you mentioned. It is hard to have your reader make a emotional connection to character(s) you just introduced. For me, whether I find a character unique, mysterious, or relatable is what makes me want to read on. Your characters captured me immediately.
The first paragraph was brilliant. I felt myself drop to the ground with Dalia. I wanted to scream with her to help her block out the voices. I loved the line "The voices weren´t familiar to her, though she felt like they knew her." It adds to the tension of the piece and emotion of Dalia as if these personal demons knew her better than she knew herself, henceforth had the upper hand to destroy her from the inside out.
I enjoyed how you used Scott, his excitement and positive outlook, as a stark contrast to Dalia and her mother. The only thing, however, is if Dalia was sitting on the floor reading her book the entire time and never looked up, how did Scott know the color of her eyes? I would make sense that he would have a file with a picture I suppose.
In the end, the last paragraph filled me with sadness and frustration that the mother had no idea that Dalia did in fact remember her as the first paragraph stated. I think that would have made all the difference.
Overall, it was a very moving piece. I felt your descriptions were spot on - pointed not long-winded (like me, apparently. I would definitely read a novel or short story by you again.