|I rate a storyteller’s ability (my own included) by how well they can capture an audience. How well do their words draw you to the story. With this one, “The Prisoner” I read through every single storyline available and was always disappointed whenever I saw an ending to any one of them. My first thought immediately after I could no longer continue an already written story was to find more by the same authors, namely “Who Me” and “Bruce Lee Gifford Jr.” and start reading a new story all over again. For that ability to keep my eyes glued to the page, I cannot give anything less than a five star review. Heck, I still want to read more, and as soon as I have the time I’ll probably try to add my own storyline in through one of the multiple side options just so there is more happening with certain characters.
With that said however, comes the negative feedback. These are things that would normally make me turn the other way and find something else to pay attention to, and I can only be glad I overlooked them for the sake of the story. There are loads of noticeable typos in your work, from spelling to duplicate words, every five minutes or so some sort of typo is going to throw a reader off as they struggle to figure out what the sentence was supposed to be. It actually reminds me of when I was ten years old and writing reports for school, these are the exact same kind of mistakes. Not bad enough to warrant loosing half a star, but if you can edit out chapters you might want to have someone proofread your work.
Heck, if you asked me I’d be up for the task.
The next major mistake (though not something that breaks the storyline) is that at predictable intervals in the storyline, almost like clockwork, there are parts that just sound too corny for someone to actually written them. Or perhaps the word I’m looking for is “overused.” … but, meh … after all this, I’d have to just include the occasional awkward parts as a part of the author’s writing style. However much I think it would be better if there were just a touch of poetry and more skillful sentence structure, it works all the same just the way it is.