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Review of The Concrete Mile  
Review by Arihanthan Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ ★★★★★ | (3.0)
Hey Sam,
That was a nice one. It was short and crisp. Everthing looks fine. But probably once place where you can make a change whould be in the begining of 4th para "They finally arrived to the chamber....". I don't think finally should be used here. I did not get a feeling that the protagonist was walking for such a long time that we could say "Finally.....he reached". These are just my thoughts.

Nevertheless nice light-weight item
Thanks for sharing
Regards,
Ari
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