Very nice, all teenagers I think would agree with this *Chuckles* I know I feel this way at times, this is well structured, good rhyme scheme, and a dash of slant rhyme. I prefer writing free verse myself. This flows very well, and makes one think.
This is a very interesting story, the only thing that I found distracting where a handful of spelling an grammar errors ((Something we are all guilty of)) You need a new line each time a different person speaks. Other then that it was an enjoyable story, and I hope to see it expanded.
- Joseph Jackson
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