|Hi Raymond. Inspirational stories are always good. The world is full of those telling people had bad things are. First of all, your premise: the road to success is smooth. I'm not sure your premise is backed-up by your argument. Also, there are a few errors creeping into your writing.
...assumption but BY a step.
...war, nor DOES HE LOSE focus ON returning home.
...people TELL you it's rough.
"Thanks, I KNOW, but I have chosen THE ROAD TO SUCCESS."
...how BAD the other road MAY be.
...decision by THOSE we accept advice from.
Success is like A puzzle: THE PIECES ARE scattered, but it takes PATIENCE and WISDOM to arrange it.
EVERY DAY you live sees the FUTURE...
...you will end up not ARRIVING at your destination.
The above are minor technical errors, but you get the idea. If you want folks to listen to your message, you have to be certain they are not distracted by errors.
Keep preaching the 'smooth road' and stay positive. Cheers