Major feels, Susie. Major feels. That is a story of both pressurizing sadness and freeing joy, and I felt all of the emotions going on so naturally. You are amazingly talented, and I pray you keep writing.
I feel as though you didn't actually incorporate the personality of Batman into the story. Batman's not a talker. He talks only as much as he needs to. That being said, the way he won seems extremely sketchy. Superman is a powerhouse, there's no way he'd let Batman catch the package--his x-ray vision would let him know it was Kryptonite. Superman is faster and stronger than Bruce Wayne, so, really, if you're story were canon, the argument must be made that Supes let the Dark Knight win. I totally agree that Batman is perfectly capable of victory in this fight, but not the way you wrote it. I hope no offense is taken.
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