I enjoyed this piece. It reminded me of my days as a recruit circa 1977 in the Rhodesian Army School of Infantry camp. Your description and background is good with dates and locations mentioned.The narrative left me wanting to read more about your life in the military. This biography is good. Well written with maybe a few tweaks to the grammar but it captured me. I hope you continue and include more detail going forward. Well done.
This a very thoughtful piece and touches on a very difficult subject. I think it is well written and the author is comfortable with use of vocabulary. I found a couple of words maybe misplaced but the story flowed well. The description made me feel as if I was there and I particularly liked the mention of rosacea. In my view it would be hard to improve on this and the author has a crisp and refreshing writing style.
A nice easy read. it does not tax the readers thinking and is pure escapism. It could also be a parable identifying the issues of addiction. i quite enjoyed it but everything was "too pat". the grammar is good and i appreciated the use of colloquialisms.
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