|Hi. I liked this piece. It quickly drew me in and the imagery is great! I could easily recall that miserable feeling, being in that stagnant heat stuck in traffic, from the picture you worded. I love that there is so much information and imagery given without it feeling overly detailed or drawn out. You slip the details in as you're telling us something else. And in the end you've managed to hold our interest.
Being from a smaller town, I was confused about where all the glass was coming from at first. The commuter traffic here is often on the highways, mostly flat ground all around, lol. I was like, is this some sort of sci-fi glass bomb? Then it clicked, oh yeah, he's in Chicago amongst tall buildings, lol.
The only thoughts for improvement I have is; are the last three words the right way to end it? It seems, I don't know, kinda against the flow of the rest of the piece. Is there a way to describe that he is dead without simply saying he is dead? Again, just thoughts. I am by no means an expert.
Thank you for your piece! Write on!