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Review by blanip
Rated: 13+ | (2.0)
Hello,

I find it a bit distributing that teenage girls are the initial focus of this piece. Obviously women and girls feel lust and desire the same as males, but you're starting your poem off sounding blamey and judgemental of women alone. If you want your caution to be taken seriously, it has to address all who are at risk and at fault.
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