one thing you should work on, and im not trying to bust your chops, this is purely constructive criticism, no more clichés. love changes everything. yes, PREACH! but get that message across with less cliché. a good idea; try free verse. never shy away from trying something new when it comes to poetry. I was gonna give you a rating of 2.0, but the ideas in this poem are legitimate. they show potential. work that.
that was so good, I kinda wanna write you a story. AWESOME LETTERS klajhaluhfiuhweiugiyfffffffffgyuyfuyfyudtlottsitaeritrkicgtopuibviyvtydjwi34jjrhhqkljwlbdbbejiiskbaposihdf;klsbncbjzxbkiuhdoioei.a;aksjhdiufh;woosihealksjdhfiouwpioudh.ah;jshoeruith seriously, bro. get famous.