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Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
And I thought dogs were man's best friend. Just goes to show, we live in modern times.

Well written, good reading flow without any distracting technical errors in grammar or spelling. The intimate emotional appeal early on hooked me. The twist pulling the rug out from under me at the end brought me back to reality with a smile.

Thanks for sharing.
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Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Very evocative free verse a testament to our times and those past. High hopes are the farthest to fall.

Centering this free verse meant I had to concentrate and focus. The ploy works for poetry where readers like to think deep and feel while spending their time.

Putting the theme in third person added the effect of watching a life story of hope broken and lost more real.

Billy Holiday became a legend, the personal cost was too high.

thanks for sharing.
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Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: E | (5.0)
Your name is always worth the read. What touched me more was noticing the award presented in the Senior's Forum by no other than Countrymom, herself.

It is good to see the forum and her presence carried on again. I stopped by a few years ago and noticed the dust, left a comment, but it was others who didn't just pause, but made the effort to bring life back for us senior folk.
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Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: E | (5.0)
These days are very wearing, indeed. I enjoyed your choice of outfits and the even mix of results.

Democracy in action.

. . . at least until anyone tried actually attending a political event as such attired.

One would have to be a major donor whose name was on the speaking list, and with a history of such outspoken fervor drenched with sweat so that the articles prescribed above would not be noticed other than as an excused eccentricity.
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Review of Reluctant Santa  
Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
What a crazy ride through your imagination with Santa dragging Brad along by his heels. Loved the whimsical festive holiday flair to the piece.

It was a big gulp to swallow without first visiting a 7-11, but I sank in my cups and Brad's easy acceptance of his fate hooked and pulled me in.

Nary a problem with grammar and the only spell issue was the one you put me as the reader in. I'm still chuckling with Brad trying to whistle now that he's lost his two front teeth.

Good job and good luck with the contest.
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Review of Fools  
Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: E | (4.0)
Caught this by clicking on the 'Read & Review' button and paused for a quick read. A few thoughts - The phrasing, change from past to present tense in some lines distracted me momentarily as did a hiccup in spelling - more tome with me

The theme of love's retrospective hooked and carried me from line to line down to the end quite effectively. The final line spoke truth and resolution quite well.

thanks for sharing and write on, good poet.
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Review of Bisheggagah  
Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoyed this light hearted ride through imagination and religious fervor. It did leave me in a pickle in one way, along with the main character little girl. Was there one angel or many? There seemed to be a bunch of the tiny critters invading her room at first but only one spoke. I suppose that is mystical and allowed during a religious experience and only adds to the power so manifested or am I wrong? Spirituality is such a question in people's lives. This poetry is a testament to that fact.

Thanks for sharing.
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Review of Super Power  
Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: E | (5.0)
Smiling here after reading this colorful and creative rendition. Never reviewed a reviewing poem before. The graphic at the top definitely made my eyes pause wondering where I had arrived at. Then I enjoyed running my vision down the lines, nodding at the super power cradling me on the left and the painted wording for my attention to rest on while gathering my thoughts.

What a creative and talented mind.
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Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: E | (4.0)
I liked repeating the first and last line to give this poem closure and meaning. I had to read a few times to grasp how the between phrases built on them. There was no confusion with the focus on sun, moon and life exploring its place but I got the feeling life was reaching outward to a greater beyond rather than the world getting smaller. Perhaps this was just one reader's perspective but thought I would share.

Thanks for sharing and write on.
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Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Asking the reader with a cry of imprisoned help left me pulling the hair out of my head. Surely, as many might find this short story worth having looked for it, there would be a large enough group to find one Sherlock Holmes.

There were some possible clues left flying about. It all depended where they landed. I hoped, of course, there would be something to crow about sooner or later. Let's say the young man in the backyard was found stringing along by a thread of logic back to the trapped girl where he tied things up nicely (including the kidnapper) and the girl and he fell in love, living happily ever after.
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Review of Attitude Matters  
Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: E | (4.5)
Congratulations on the Writers Cramp win today. My favorite line - “Bald tires give you the slip?” Hank said.

Nice take on the prompt. It was fun seeing your choice of context with the prompt words. A very practical resolution at the end of the tale allowing time to work things out and giving a moment of simple pleasure enjoying the sunset.

Thanks for sharing.
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Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Favorite line - Seraphim songs interrupt.

Like the way the heavenly imagery wove between the lines. Appreciated was the post note reference explaining the type of poetry. I admire those willing to explore and try their hand with different kinds of poetry. It takes a descipline I find lacking in myself. It made me wonder what got you interested in writing poetry and who your favorite poets might be.
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Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice cadence to the lines of rhyme. The title and description caught my eye. Having enjoyed reading this poet before I knew I was in for an interesting journey. The ending caught me a little by surprise. Not being a sports fan I wondered at the connection of the red stop green go lights with them and sporting events. Otherwise the poem read like a dream.
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Review of Volcanic Claims  
Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: E | (4.5)
Read this as an editor's pick in the current Comedy Newsletter. That was some redecorating job mother nature did for you. Only good thing about owning your own living volcano is after it got through spouting off there was nothing left worth picking up the pieces.

Sorry for your loss. Am wondering if there was any follow-up after you threw the insurance guy as a sacrificial offering into your backyard volcano...
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Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: E | (4.5)
Saw this posted as an editor's choice in the current Comedy Newsletter. cute poem from the viewpoint of all mom's, I'm sure. 'Take it or leave it' is quite the kid dish. Served everywhere for weeks on end as long as left overs remain, I see the adult reasoning of mom's world round. If kids survive this diet, nothing will ever put them down.

Thanks for sharing a fun read.
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Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Wowah. What an imagination put to use. Great read. Sucked me in and held me captive from the first word to the last. Ran across this horror story in a current newsletter. Saw the awardicon. Congrats if you ever return. Saw you haven't been online in this site for years. Maybe the zombie girls got you. I hope not.


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Review of The Walk  
Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: E | (5.0)
Classic Jacky. Quick and tight delivery, one character focus, with a lead in and surprise twist at the end.

The read is always fresh, even though the formula is pretty static. What brings the tale to life and makes it worthwhile is the imagination of the author, ever searching and finding the human element in the plot.

Thanks for your long and constant additions to flash fiction on the site.
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Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Simple and direct, this poem with its theme of love's loss and emptiness filled is heart warming. Isn't it amazing how all pets such as a kitten ever ask is to be loved and love in return.

Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.

- an admirer of your work.
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Review of The Real You  
Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: E | (4.5)
Nice ripple of thought and rhyme tying the lines of poetry together. I enjoyed experiencing the flow of words and reflection they brought to bear.

Some good work here which deserves more public exposure. The willingness to put oneself and their work out there isn't always easy. This one paid off for this reader.

Thanks for sharing. Lots to think about and take with after the reading is done. Write on.


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Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
This is quite the productive WdC writer. I've made it a point to review more but didn't expect to find another exposition by this author so quickly after reviewing another from the 'Read & Review' button. BTW, thanks again for the personal feedback on the last one. It meant a lot having that communication.

This piece reveals how networking and writing combined are the strength of staying power in action. Sadly, there was that blasted 'Invalid Item' staring me in the face of all the praise which followed.

the passage of time does eat away at the best of well remembered things, doesn't it?

Thanks for sharing. Write on.


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Review of Mother's Day  
Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: E | (4.5)
A reminder of how love's owning makes room for understanding with it's loss. What makes this poem so effective is the reflection of both in such few short words. There is an ephemeral quality breathing through the lines, a wistfulness, as it were. Potent feeling left as a reminder to handle loves owning, well.

Thanks for sharing the world of the WdC.


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Review of Addictions  
Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Yes. Oh my. Solid build up. Step by step unleashing a little more suspense. Threads unraveling, twisting, dangling into that final hangman's knot at the surprising final jerk at the end.

I did notice a couple of simple distractions, like this one at the first of the tale - clearing her vision, the(n) typed in her password

Other than that a nice blending of modern day horror, an abandoned life and child due to Facebook with that centuries older one of a vampire.

Thanks for sharing this jewel of a good read.
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Review of Conquered  
Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Welcome, new member to our writing community. Posting so quickly shows how much this art form is important to you.

I liked taking this theme into a form of mental poetry driven by behavior. Nice juxtaposition that quickly formed tone and mood.

The only thing I would change is a few grammatical corrections to the last line, torn for toren for example and taking out the second 'the'.

Take care. Thanks for sharing, and I'd be happy to help if things seem a bit confusing finding your way around the site.
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Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
It is obvious there was a lot of effort put into this poem. The tribute to Charlotte Bronte added interest and hooked me into reading.

There is a definite tone and mood carried throughout the choice of wording. I appreciated the end note offering guidance to the content and structure.

The only change this reader would have appreciated is adding white space between main thoughts to the end note. I think there is a way to create a popup out of the note to click on so that the poem stands out better for itself.

Thanks for sharing and I hope these suggestions are taken as only the thoughts of one reader who enjoyed your work and looks forward to seeing more.



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Review by Bob'n Around
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Indeed. This would definitely make a great drinking song at a pub to celebrate anyone's birthday, it wouldn't matter, that patter the same, everyone getting fatter.

<blink> See? The effect of reading this poetic verse is a curse, it is catching as well, I'd give it five stars but my heads ringing like a bell.

So I'm off to the pub for a brew, one or two. I'll let you know how it goes when I'm through.


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