Strange, this story, and how I read it, paragraph from paragraph, bottom to top. A novelty of mine occasioned by clicking on the 'read & review' button, feeling a bit gun shy of finding a good find. I couldn't stop.
What an unfolding tale read backwards, the end becoming the start. Sometimes, that is the way life and stories about it weave themselves into being. Endings become beginnings become endings again, chaining us into our meager realities where we try to make sense of it all.
wOw. Saw this poem won last month's 'Write From The Heart' poetry contest and came to find out why. Outstanding combination of rhyme, emotion and vivid flowing meaningful revelation. What a welcome read about nurturing the passage of time to find its true value.
Saw this “Ba, Dum, Dum!” flash fiction featured in the latest Comedy Newsletter. Dark humor well done. It was a nice visit with a chuckle. One of the fine things about writing and reading is that it has been little affected by the pandemic. Thanks for sharing your work.
I liked the way this article reflects our youth centered culture. Statistics showing our aging population is a worry of many countries. We need youth working and creating in order to support the rest of us in our reclining, well earned years, just as we did for our parent's generation.
Deep and disturbing, this tortuous revelation of longing's inner core. There are diamonds of imagery flashing within these lines. Jewels bound to a golden ring struggling to fit an open searching hand.
There is an urgency to time trickling its eternal restless shifting sands, promising to cover lost hope in final peace and rest.
As always, focused professionally written content exemplifying what good poetry should be. I like the way this author takes personal experience and makes wisdom out of it available to all. The charm of his rhyme adds clarity and easily lilting grace to reading his verse.
Hmm. A flash point of emotion on display, discharged by moral indignation. that came across with great force. Hiccups in grammar and punctuation slowed my reading flow but seemed to connect with the mood.
I liked the fast action jostling between characters. It showed how much more there is to be learned at school than reading books, answering questions and taking tests.
there is a lot going on in this mind stream spilling into words. the heaviness extends into the article being written in one long paragraph. The reader has to want to take the extra effort to find the important parts being offered into view.
the treatise appears to be from a non native English writer a bit unfamiliar with grammatical form. Downloading and using the free version at grammerly.com might be helpful in polishing up the discourse.
Favorite lines - Your body is no longer the vessel that carries you through life. Its your prison.
An interesting mind stream echoing into words. Reading this felt like I was taking a rite of passage into becoming less than human. Lots of imagery. I liked the way it came across a little fractured. It helped having the focus turn to the involvement of the second main character.
It's worth a look back and perhaps extending the effort just to see where it goes.
Such a heart warming tale. I enjoyed meeting the groundhog family, untainted by political unrest, the pandemic, or climate change. The conversation felt natural and more human than many I've witnessed in the news lately.
A joy to read yet another piece of fine flash fiction.
What an imagination. I could tell the writer enjoyed creating this work of semi-erotic art. The reading flow had lots of grammar hiccups but the theme was so interesting it was easy to continue on.
Curiosity seemed the motivation for the red dress magically being accepted and transforming Matt into Mary. I would have liked to see a 'baby sitter' tie in on how the young kid was going to live on his own.
Profound sentiment encased in no more than three word lines of free verse. Simple truth wrung out by true emotion expressed. The meaning hovers, floats, almost transparent unless looked upon directly with great focus and humility. Self evident revelation is often a byproduct of experience with unforeseen consequence.
Well done. A Keeper, ready to be released to an unsuspecting world.
Ah. People will be people no matter where they might dwell. Mixing and highlighting relationships into a Sci/fi setting is a good way to bring emotion in, adding color, nuance and connection between writer and reader.
There are some technical details that turned into hiccups disturbing my reading flow such as finding 'out' in place of where 'our' belonged. I liked space location, the work setting and mention of a special lovers day. It would be fun to see these expanded into a larger edition of this tale.
Emotions paint such vivid mental pictures. Dark black wishes, perhaps a few green with envy mix in surreal images with the blues. What I like best about this quick and fervent guide to modern dating is weighing of how things work, how they might be better served and the tick of time passing along the way.
I liked this soul searching mind puzzle. It blends deep and shallow questions with a sprinkling of humor added to the mix. What I enjoyed most was seeing the author attempt to weave words together in an attempt to build an answer defying the ages.
Nice punch of action and suspense in this flash fiction. The writing looked hurried as well, with several grammatical hiccups read along the way distracting my reading flow. I liked the focus and edgy visual imagery. Entering contests with prompts is good practice in polishing one's set of authoring skills.
Thanks for the ride. I got hooked into coming and reading about this adventure when I learned how long you've made this your second home. I wanted to learn a bit more about this phenomena (and did).
This is not so much a travelogue (although it is that, as well), as it is a journey into the heart and soul of an explorer into the human condition. The reaction to meeting penpal and excitement sharing roller coaster ride felt much the same. I loved the green nails image.
Being a published author who knows their craft, shows.
Wadda fine find. You cat'n around pussyfooting a tall tale like this without pause. Makes my own sound punny, tis truth.
Saw you flirt'n at SCREAMS!!! and dropped by. Glad I did. Won't catch me feeding strays or stealing what don't belong. Got me a half wild kitty seems partial kin to what you described. Difference is, mine keeps others at bay, god bless. Think you verah much.
Welcome back, and thank you for your emotional tribute to those hosting this site. Sometimes writing can be a solitary and lonely experience. Having fans supporting your efforts is truly a blessing not all are able to embrace. Writing and posting here shows how much writing is a part of your life. Coming back often can only strengthen that.
An interesting find when plucking the 'read & review' button. I usually pass up longer reads, went to the bottom, read the last paragraph and worked my way backwards through this woman's harried life to the beginning. I ended up at the title and description hardly knowing the time had passed. A fascinating journey. Loved the 'What if' comment and where it had taken both the author and me, the reader on its journey.
Some good weaving of imagery with the doll. A few technical hiccups such as - on what little she know of the child. All in all, a welcome treat to find in the land of the WdC.
This kind of sublime rhyme is catchy enough to be easily memorized and used for walking and talking to oneself with. A remembrance of wisdom to be passed on to children who walk smaller steps, twice as many, to keep up with one's own. Passing it on offers encouragement, courage and dangles satisfaction when one has to walk alone in unknown paths.
Nice graphic cover for this small bit of meaningful prose. I wondered which WdC contest this was written for and if there was a specific prompt. No matter. The free verse speaks for itself. That challenge of creating succinct inspiration within so few words met with success.
A fun read, filled with mystery and tight suspense. My mind kept going on after the ending, filling in a few echo's, like, who these two men were, their past and why the obvious threat of there mere presence.
After ruminating a bit, I caught on this was a piece of flash fiction with the prompt in bold meant for a contest. Quite imaginative and well written other than one technical blip - You would have though that anybody
Quite the master of turning emotion into words. Well done.
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