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Review of If Not For Moms  
Review by Carla
Rated: E | (4.5)
Yup, you said said it, if only we could have our leaders listen to their moms! I appreciate your thoughts today being Mother's Day and I thank you for them and the good read. I surely wish my boys thought that I was seldom wrong, I surely wish that I was seldom wrong! As a daughter I hope I'm seldom wrong, although my mom is in the habit of telling me to make the decisions that effect the life she now leads at the asisted living facility. As a mom it's hard to be all things to everyone. I'm looking forward to a dinner that I'm not cooking and having one son and my mom here to celebrate the day.
Carla
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Review of MISSING YOU, MOM.  
Review by Carla
Rated: E | (4.5)
Good job of writing, Sherri. As I read I thought about both my job as a mom and of the daughter I am to my mom. My mom resides nearby in an assisted living facility and at times it is so very hard to be the daughter and make the right decisions for her, the person who used to help me to make my decisions. My boys don't live to far from me either and being their mom is wonderful, but can at times be difficult. I don't always have the answer they are looking for. Being all things to everyone, kind of wears you down. It will be nice to see one of the boys and have my mom for dinner tonight on Mother's Day. No decisions, their dad, my husband of 37 years is doing the cooking!
I hope the boys will miss me as you do your mom, some day. I know when the day comes for my mom, I will miss her as you miss your mom. Thanks for a good read and something more to think about.
Carla
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Review of BREAD  
Review by Carla
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Always interested in history,I noticed your story about the Jewish experience during WWII. I was born in the US and am a Jew, not following any traditions etc. but wanting to know everything that had happened. I learned a lot and enjoyed the new and special way it was presented through a child's experience. Thanks for the great read.
Carla
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Review by Carla
Rated: E | (4.0)
Nickey, It's a great story for kids, but you need to be a bit more careful with your capitalization and grammar.If you are going to use a capital for each color kingdom, you need to continue it all the way through. Some capitals do not belong at all. You have good ideas, but you need to take it easy and get your details in correctly. When you go over it, I'm sure there will be an even better story to tell.
Thanks for the good evening read.
Carla
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Review by Carla
Rated: E | (4.5)
What fun to read! I could vividly picture all the images you brought to mind!Your poem makes a good story for a young person, but also makes enjoyable read for those of us who might be older.I can just imagine a child with his mouth open in the shape of a giant "O"!
Thanks for the fun read!
Keep up the good work!
Carla
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Review by Carla
Rated: E | (4.5)
Ah Shannon, I had to smile all the way through your poem at the glimpse of this little devil you invoked and the pranks that were unproked! It must have been delightful fun to create all these images, that you describe so well. One could just see, or not, the little one getting into each scrape!
Good job!
Carla
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Review of First drum set  
Review by Carla
Rated: E | (4.5)
Ah Gary, Such memories your work conjures up!The limited words, still bring out the sounds we can hear in our heads, when we give a percussion instrument to a small child. Now that's a talent, good job.
I remember giving into my younger son, not as young as your son. Mine was in middle school, when he discover the drums. I got him the snare drum and told him of course jokingly (when I think about maybe not jokingly), to play the drum in the closet with his closet door and bedroom door closed!
Carla
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Review by Carla
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
You write so realisticly, arguments and the details of a warm shoreline are very vivid.
You know that these mother daughter arguments could happen in any household and will ring true to your readers. You can almost feel the weight on her shoulders, good job!
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Review of Reality  
Review by Carla
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very meaningful! Yes, sometimes it's easy not to look beyond the smiles. People feel safer when they don't have to deal with too much knowledge. We all want better for our children and you cann't turn back the clock.
Your poem brought back some memories of people I have known and were surprised at what had really happened to them.
Good thought provoking work.
Carla
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Review by Carla
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I could honestly feel for your character as she moved from her job to her home. Very nicely done.
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Review of Chapter 1  
Review by Carla
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
I enjoyed this first chapter and look forward to reading more to find out what happens and that's a great sign of good writing. I have a question though, about the era she is in when she is dreaming. She is wearing a Victorian low cut dress and he is wearing a waistcoat and jeans. She also says "I feel rather beautiful tonight." I don't know if she would have said that to a stranger. Is she in the present day during her dream? Now a days people do say things, which they might not have in the Victorian era. I don't know if this has come up before, I happen to like the Victorian era in clothing design especially since I'm in "Oliver".
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Review by Carla
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Chuck,
You have the ability to keep the reader interested, even when the subject isn't an easy read! Some questions do come to mind, but wouldn't make too much of a difference in your story. Since you mentioned how old you were when your father died, how old were you when your mom died? Just a thought of course.
Some of your experience actually did happen in my family, when my dad died and my mom had to answer that question. I may be having to answer that question some time down the road too.
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