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Review by Donnie Darko
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
First of all, I would like to commend you on your general writing skills. Bravo!

Secondly, I like how you made your character seem very distant and apathetic. Considering that he has contacts in the underworld wasn't much of a surprise. And the comedy value of a band of small people going missing just seems comical to mention.

There's very little (at least, I can't see) that I find wrong with this piece. Perhaps that it seemed a little brief and rushed. Who is Anne? How does he know her? Are they even friends and if so, why would she turn to you in a moment of need with that attitude?

Keep it up!
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