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Review of Eyes  
Review by Celtic SeaWolf
Rated: E | (4.0)
This line is particularly powerful:

"Our eyes do not live in the world we create for ourselves, they live in the world that they see."

So very true and something that we tend to forget or perhaps not even realize!

This piece is a very powerful window on what we see and what we choose to see. Well done!

I think that perhaps a word is missing in this line:

"Because in our lives our eyes see everything even if close them shut,..."

Should it read:

"Because in our lives our eyes see everything, even if we close them shut,..."?
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Review of Medical Model  
Review by Celtic SeaWolf
Rated: E | (4.5)
Loved this sarcastic, tongue-in-cheek examination of the current mental health modus operandi. So true! Push the pills over everything else. Some pills are a godsend, but personally I feel they are far over-prescribed as well as certain disorders *eyes ADHD and Bipolar* being misdiagnosed. All to feed the pharmaceutical companies and insurance.

Sorry, I digress on what is supposed to be a review of your poem, but that is just how good your poem is! It made me think!

My favorite line(s) were:
"Why not a tablet
When the Black Dog comes?"

and

"Trauma, lack and fear
Beneath the surface unaddressed"

Great job!
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Review of Lost in Thoughts  
Review by Celtic SeaWolf
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow. Within the first few sentences I was having difficulty breathing and despite sitting in an air conditioned room I felt the hot sun beating down on my back, sweat rolling off me.

I continued reading this marvelous short story and I "became" the protagonist in your work. I felt his losses, I felt the pains of his labor and his joys and sorrows that he was sharing, via you, the author.

You have done an amazing job here, simply amazing. There were a few places that could have used commas or perhaps some different phrasing. No, not that last one- the phrasing fit with the protagonist and his circumstances. Again, amazing job and I look forward to reading more of your work!
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