|WOW, when can I read the second Chapter, I'm so intrigued now, I want to know who wrote the letter and I want to find out what is actually going on with Torin. I must say I am intrigued and your readers will be too...
I only found a few grammar (well more like typing) mistakes:
"that was sitting on the one of the seats." I believe the first "the" should be erased.
""In the marketplace mostly, but us runner boys use it to," said the boy." 'too' instead of 'to'
"because he is not quite the man you use to know" 'used to' instead of 'use to'
"Both the woman and Habert noticed Kenton" 'Halbert' instead of 'Habert'
But seriously I love it, may I please be one of the first to read the next Chapter? Otherwise I'm going to have to hunt you down... grrr