|This is a nice poem. I like the way it speaks to the muse of the subject. From a structural standpoint, as a Shakespearean style sonnet I think you need to look at the following:
1. Very minor but these style sonnets are supposed to have each line start with a capital letter (I just learned that this year from an English professor who happens to also be my best friends father and biggest critic, lol)
2. The rhyme scheme is a little off, supposed to be abab, cdcd, efef, gg where every "a" rhymes with "a", "b" with "b" and so on...yours appears to be abab, cdcd, defe, gg.
Overall though I enjoyed it, thanks for sharing.