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Review of All That Matters  
Review by CAT
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi,

CAT here...I really liked the imagination and creativity of this story, and I do not generally gravitate towards supernatural or paranormal-type reading. I enjoyed how it all came together in the end. It was neat, but not too neat, which is good from my point of view.

I am not a critic regarding grammar and punctuation, really. I do think, though, it would be a benefit to separate your paragraphs as it would make it flow better and be easier on the reader. It gives the reader a break, just for a second, to digest what they've read before moving on and allows them to savor the story instead of feeling rushed.

Just my 2 cents, for what it's worth! Please keep writing!

CAT

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Review by CAT
Rated: E | (4.0)
Cute story...he sounds like a real charmer:) I get the flow, truly, but the last paragraph kind of jumps a little. I get it, but you might want to break into a new paragraph after the 2nd sentence. (Just my silly 2 cents, for what it's worth.) Please keep writing!
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Review by CAT
Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice little piece you started with...you should write about, and post, some of those memories. They might make for some interesting reading and fun writing. "I remember this time, once, when...." Keep going...
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Review of Sunstroke  
Review by CAT
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi! I did enjoy this story and could relate to it well. You may be right in that for an essay or short story there could be a little less detail or description to clutter the overall impression in the beginning....BUT, if this were part of a chapter in a book it would be more in place, and, that said, you do it well, though. I really felt like I was standing with you in Nora's house. You also lived up to the synopsis of the story well and made the reader understand how shocking reality is to a child when they are hit with it from time to time as they grow up. Great job!
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Review of Knock Knock  
Review by CAT
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Very good! Creative, imaginative and made me want more. I like the style you have and can see the influences you mentioned in your bio. It also comes across that you are enjoying yourself. Keep it up, please!
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Review of When is it home?  
Review by CAT
Rated: E | (4.5)
I get it! Very romantic and spiritual.
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