ChristineB's (christineb) Reviews

Although I don't share your religious belief, and I myself am addicted to Instagram, I find your positive outlook and appreciation of beauty very appealing. Keep writing!

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Review of The Impatient Cat

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Rated: E | (5.0)

Awesome! I love that you called the cat "Barnaby," too. It makes him seem a bit of an old-fashioned gentleman.

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#4867685

Review of The Invisible Squirrel

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Rated: E | (5.0)

Wonderful story for the Cramp as always, and full of creative details from the ground bat gonads to Faldo's chartreuse eyebrows. Good luck in the contest. 🙂

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#4867683

Review of The Invisible Squirrel

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Rated: E | (5.0)

Ha! I love the dialogue between the two squirrels and I think you really succeeded with the comedy part of the prompt. 🙂

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#4867682

Review of The Invisible Squirrel.

Review by ChristineB

Rated: E | (5.0)

I like your take on "The Invisible Squirrel" and the family dynamic with the active little girl and the new baby. You'll need to change one of your genres to "Comedy" though, for the Writer's Cramp prompt. I missed that part at first in my own entry. 🙂

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#4865721

Review of Embers of Orange

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Rated: E | (4.5)

Nice work, evoking all the oranges in nature, from sunsets to citrus to flowers to fire! However, the prompt contained a link to specific syllable counts for each line. While your first line has 10 or 11 syllables (depending on the regional pronunciation of "orange") and your last line has 1, the lines in between may not align.

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#4865720

Review of Let The Countdown Begin

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Rated: E | (5.0)

Great work! You brought in the Netherlands holiday Bianca mentioned in the prompt, and figured out the syllable count of Oranjegekte.

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#4863423

Review of What Grandma Knew

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

Wonderful family story; glad they were there for Marcus. Congratulations on winning the Cramp!

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#4863224

Review of Capture the Moment

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Rated: E | (5.0)

I like how you use active words to evoke what the picture manages to do (uplift, enchant, entice, and exercise).

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#4850205

Review of HAPPINESS

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Rated: E | (5.0)

I love your positive energy and wish you happiness in the new year.

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#4849893

Review of A Madman with a Gun

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Rated: E | (5.0)

Nice work; yes, the statistics about gun violence in the US might lead to changes if they were widely known and believed.

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#4849892

Review of Winter Ebbs - Villanelle form

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Rated: E | (5.0)

I like how your poem captures the season, where winter temporarily seems to be fading only to come back again.🌨️☃️

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Review of Babysitting Baby

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)

Interesting- “Baby” is a dog. Congrats on your Cramp win.

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#4834038

Review of Musical gifts that went awry

Review by ChristineB

Rated: E | (5.0)

I like how they, “played the long game of love” on their 25th anniversary. Very true to life; nicely written. Congrats on your Cramp win. 🙂

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#4832761

Review of Wattle We Do

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)

I like how you brought in all the Australian plants and animals, with a happy celebratory tone. Congrats on your Cramp win!

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#4830499

Review of Duke

Review by ChristineB

Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

Very nice storytelling, as always. I like how you set the stage for the dog to have such an enormous impact before he finally appeared. I guess the only thing that threw me a bit is that his family got the dog when he was 10, and dogs don’t normally live more than 20 years…which would make him no older than 30 now, very young to have lost both parents. But then, his mom pours her energy into gardening instead of the “children she was never able to have,” making me wonder if he was adopted, and then not fully loved/not fully considered her child, and that played into him being jealous of the dog? In any case, it seems like a nuanced, layered short story, a little bit like a complicated poem. It suggests a lot.

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#4829994

Review of A Freakier Friday

Review by ChristineB

Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

Very nice choice of subject for the contest; I like the way you brought in Peter Allen’s being attracted to men and getting to kiss the love of his life. And poor Liza accidentally gave her own last name when she woke up in Peter Allen’s POW cell…Congrats on your Cramp win today, too. 🙂

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#4829859

Review of A Divine Wind

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Rated: E | (5.0)

Very creative and funny. I like the idea of “divine wind” punning up with “passing wind”.

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#4829602

Review of Midnight's Call

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)

I like the story, especially the little details of Sarah’s resentment of Mark’s callousness, her parents’ judging her for coming home, and her singing success getting her a position she didn’t expect. Your ability to write nearly 1,000 words for the contest is great, too; you successfully maintained interest and high quality writing in a story that is on the longer side for the daily contest. The prompt has a requirement for one of the genres to be Mythology, though. I think some mythological references could be a quick add on in a story like this, though, since many myths have failed relationships as a theme.

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#4829523

Review of Tell me said the elephant

Review by ChristineB

Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

I like your animal rights take and the familial aspect of it - like in the lines “Do you hear our mother’s call, when you make us haul your lumber?”
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I interpreted the prompt as meaning we needed to write on a different theme from the song, although it could be interpreted differently.

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#4829338

Review of Now or Never

Review by ChristineB

Rated: E | (5.0)

Good job incorporating other song titles too, in addition to the prompt ones. 🙂One note- you have “I am so sorry” instead of “I’m Sorry.”

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#4829205

Review of "Summer Evening Prayer"

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Rated: E | (5.0)

Nicely done! I think you may have accidentally left a few extra words from the prompt at the end of your poem (about the genre).

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#4829117

Review of The Bradbury Chronicles

for entry "Pawn It"

Review by ChristineB

Rated: 18+ | (5.0)

Nice work- I like her going through this process of evaluation and changing her mind, giving up the ring to the waiter when she knows she won’t be happy. It’s terrible that she would be pregnant when she was unwilling in the whole thing, though.