|hey! thank you for requesting me to review your work!
Straight off the bat, I loved the way polyamorous relationships were portrayed here. It helped me understand how things work in such relationships and remove the stigma attached to it.
I am not a part of the fandom, so if u feel any of my review points wouldn't shift the fanfic to a great degree, you can ignore it and I'd apologize in advance for it.
*Filipino, Italian, Japanese and Dutch can be used as descriptions. But as a reader who hasn't been exposed to the world much, it was very hard for me to imagine their emphasized features. I would need more physical descriptions than just the countries they were from.
* Chapter 3 was pretty overlapping with pov's. In the first chapter, I could determine it was Joan's, and the second it was Seto's. In the third one, there was quick switching of pov's which made me..confused.
*I felt that Marc, as a character didn't have any defining traits. Seto's and Mokuba's were distinct because of chapter 2 and 5. And you've already let Joan's character to be decided by the readers, so there's no trouble with that.
*While reading chapter 4, I was initially confused as to what pissed the attendant off such that he had to call in the security to get all of them out. ( I even wondered if attendants were actually that rude) Turns out its racism( yikes.. I sometimes hate how true it can be )
*I love the Kuriboh tactic you introduced here. Sounds pretty efficient if you'd ask me :)
*The descriptions of the environment were very easy on the brain. It was easy to understand the tone as a reader. soo.. good job!