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Review of Humble Bragging  
Review by Lassie
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very positive. What was going on with Bob, your cat? You never did say what the deal was. I have spent my entire life working and going to school. I understand the need for organization. The calendar always works for me, even now. Do you have a planner? I have used Franklin Covey's original planner for thirty years at least. I like the ring binder because it is more flexible. You can add and remove what you want. My last degree was online. Classrooms are a hundred percent better than online, at least in my opinion. Anyway, keep chugging along, good luck with your endeavors.
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Review by Lassie
Rated: E | (5.0)
Sounds good. Organized well. As a reader anyway I did notice a couple of things. It might not be important, just things that sort of sprung out at me when reading it.

"Public speaking has always been a challenge for me. I faced public speaking in school, and it was always hair-raising for me, ... " I would remove one of the "for me"

In the same paragraph the phrase or similar phrase, "speaking opportunities" and "opportunities" maybe use a different word that means opportunities in a couple of places.

As I said, these may not even be important. It's just as a reader they seemed to strike me as reading.
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Review by Lassie
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is beautiful. It is the first time I have read anything from a daughter or son's viewpoint. I love the way you show how much you love your father. It is also the perfect description of how the soldier is taken away from their family to fight a war that shouldn't even be. I grew up during the Vietnam war and say many men get drafted. My own brother was scared he would be called to fight a war that couldn't be won. All we were doing was sending our young men to die and be maimed.
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Review by Lassie
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is so true. You put it in the perfect verse. I can really relate to everything you wrote. We keep our memories and no one else knows most of them but ourselves. Seems like more and more of the actors, authors, and musicians I grew up loving are passing away every day. I hear conversations and when people talk about being born years after I graduated high school I have to tell them they make me feel old. I really like your poem a lot.
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Review by Lassie
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I am sorry for the loss of your mother. I can't imagine what it is like. I still have my mother but will someday feel the same deep pain. Your poem is very well written. It follows a logical sequence and has a nice rhyme. It shows the process from losing your mother to the last rites of burial. Happens too fast.
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Review of Nani  
Review by Lassie
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is beautiful yet it broke my heart. I rescued a 5.5 month old rough collie that needed medical attention. We got him back to health except for the arthritis in his front leg. He was the best dog I have ever had. He developed bladder cancer and we had to let him go at 10.5 yrs old so similar to how you let Nani go. Now we have a 10.5 Month old rough collie.
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Review of Frank's Way  
Review by Lassie
Rated: E | (5.0)
I always liked Frankie. There was a cartoon when I was a kid where he was a rooster singing in the hen yard and all of the hen's would swoon, say, "Fraaaankie", and then pass out. I like this because it covers Frank's rise to fame so accurately. Nice.
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Review of The letter  
Review by Lassie
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like this idea. I did something like this years ago for a Writer's Digest monthly contest.
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Review by Lassie
Rated: E | (5.0)
I Loooooved Mayberry. Nicely written, brings back a lot of memories. This is when television was wholesome. That must've been really awesome to have the guy who whistled the theme song visit your school. I have a Yellow Nape Amazon parrot that can do the beginning but never learned the entire tune. Thanks for the memories.
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Review of Gymnastics  
Review by Lassie
Rated: E | (5.0)
Nicely done. I have always liked Anacrostic poems. You did a really nice job with your choice of words.
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Review by Lassie
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I liked this a lot. Nice idea about Santa being under the weather and Mrs. Claus having to take control. With his belly, I can see Santa having a heart attack and the high blood sugar. What a tragedy though that Santa can't eat cookies. After all, every child in the world leaves him milk and cookies. Cute. Written very well. I could almost see Santa in the refrigerator and Mrs. Claus fighting the wind outside.
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Review by Lassie
Rated: E | (5.0)
I agree, a lot of things in the past need to stay in the past. I also believe though we sometimes need to pull some of the past out and look at it with older eyes and heal from it. I have a lot of things in my past that the only way I could put it behind me was to first pull it out and face it for what it was and not what it is.

Nice article.
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Review by Lassie
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this. My whole life I have been in love with butterflies in general. I even had a butterfly tatooed on my shoulder. this was very informative. I never knew where monarchs came from and I also didn't know they migrated that far (I live in Michigan). I have noticed over my lifetime I see fewer and fewer of these beautiful and graceful butterflies.
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Review of COLORS  
Review by Lassie
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
The description, "An old man on a park bench" caught my interest right away, sounded interesting. Nice conversation with himself that reveals part of his past. I like the addition of the puppy and that he names it Max. Is this character used in any of your other writings? I would like to read them if you do.
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Review by Lassie
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
I liked this a lot. Cute idea of a genie going to group therapy for anger management. I like the play on words, done very nicely. The ending is humorous. I am curious about what happens once S. Mann uses up her wishes on drinks. Plus, when the genie goes back to his bottle he says the person will get more than they wished. Maybe a sequel? That would be nice.
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Review of Dear Journal  
Review by Lassie
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I have had some crazy dreams. For years i have promised mysef I would write them in my own journal. I have written some of them down. The strange thing is to this day I still remember vivid details of a lot of them even though I never wrote them. Do you have those you remember vividly?
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Review by Lassie
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Again, I love it. Can`t wait for more.
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Review of The End of Time  
Review by Lassie
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Loved it. Once I started reading I couldn't stop. Do you have part two written? I noticed a couple of things like a word written twice and a plural form where it should be singular. They were mostly things we do when getting into what we are writing and will catch when rereading. Great story, unique idea. Need to find part 2, want to read it.
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Review of What Alien?  
Review by Lassie
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Different. I guess there is some sort of comedy in this, I am not seeing it though. Maybe I am not reading it in the right frame of mind or something. I think what my biggest thought after reading this is what is the point of the story? Maybe there isn't supposed to be one, I don't know.
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Review by Lassie
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I think it's funny the mother tells her daughter they should find something to do together yet they have to abstain from sex for a month. I guess that's doing something together. LOL. I was raised in a Southern Baptist family with many preachers in my family. Fortunately, I never heard of a "try-out" for anything that required abstaining from sex. ha! ha!

I loved the story.
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Review by Lassie
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Nice. The attached article and poem are interesting. As a kid the library was my favorite place, it still is. I have spent my entire life in school and I just turned 60. The more I learn the less I realize I know. What do we do with our knowledge? We share it and teach others what we have learned. I am a substitute teacher and love it.
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Review of Malaco Malone  
Review by Lassie
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
A nice little story with a good description of the characters and twist at the end. I love the fact the little girl was the one doing the killing. I also liked the ending. Apparently, the little girls new "daddy" will deserve what he gets. Nice story for Distorted Minds.
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Review of Dear Me  
Review by Lassie
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very well written. The structure is perfect. I love the optimism you put in it and your goals for the year are clear. I know you will accomplish your goals for the year plus more. I still need to try and eck out mine but my positivity recently has been really low due to being extremely overly stressed.
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Review of Angelique  
Review by Lassie
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I enjoyed this. Written very well. The ending was a bit of a surprise. I don't see God wanting an angel to marry a demon though. Maybe if there were more of a purpose exposed to the marriage between the two. When I started reading I thought it was two people who were living in the afterlife so didn't expect it to be an angel and demon.
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Review of 3rd Year Prompts  
Review by Lassie
Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
NICE! I like this. Do you have more of the prompts? I am definitely going to use these. I especially like the idea of using song and movie titles as prompts. I love quotes by people but never thought about using them as writing prompts. Thank you for taking the time to list and share.
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