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Review by Cristina
Rated: E | (5.0)
Very helpful tips; it takes a lot of time to develop one single story; whether it is a short story or a novel; a lot of patience and insight is required.
Characters must come to life and should be real just like real life.
The plot must be interesting so that people can be captivated by one’s writing.
It should not be a long account of happenings but should include emotion, tone, a good presentation of all the characters and a flow of ideas.

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Review by Cristina
Rated: E | (3.5)
A good lesson but not all will learn from this inspirational story.

This story reads like a narrative, the mother is basically the narrator; the characters do not really talk to each other, they are just standing by in the story.
This story can also relate to people today; in our modern societies, people are driven by money and power and tend to forget the importance of relying in a power which is much greater than themselves.
To those that are believers in God, this story makes perfect sense; to those who have no religion or belief in God, this story will be a bit absurd.
It is all very relative to one’s life and circumstances and also how people view religion.
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Review by Cristina
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Uma história verdadeiramente interessante.
Faz bom uso de palavras.
Esta história pode ser interpretada de maneira que o que se passou com o Jacob, pode acontecer também na vida real de cada um de nós.
Estamos todos muito ocupados com o que se está a passar á nossa volta e estamos distânciados da nossa família que está dentro da nossa própria casa.
Rosana ocupa-se muito da sua vida pessoal e ignora o filho Jacob.
Jacob precisava da ajuda da mãe e não a encontra porque ela se encontra com as amigas ou a trabalhar. Á noite está demasiado cansada para tentar saber se o filho se encontra bem ou se necessita da sua ajuda.
Uma grande lição de vida.
Uma grande história.
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Review by Cristina
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
An interesting account of maybe being in a comatose state after a dramatic accident or a life-threatening event.

The writer describes beings that are not human but have some human like qualities.
“ disheveled Viking types...”
“Mutant types”, “midgets” and “giants” are all characters that the writer makes use of to describe what he saw or dreamt of whilst in hospital.

He feels very ill at ease in this setting, as if he is in hell.
Vivid images of the scenarios he sees and comes across, being quite frightening, “ everything is burning around him including the soles of his boots”
He is quite terrified and very ill at ease in this horrible scenery.

Eventually he wakes up in the hospital: “ they told him he was lucky to be alive...” emphasizing the fact that he had been in great danger and had almost died.

A good short story, with a lot of imagery and creativity on the part of the writer.
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Review of Crowd  
Review by Cristina
Rated: E | (4.0)
Is this a short story or do you intend it to be part of a novel?

Could turn out into a great story or even novel.

It is very typical of people to want to gather up in order to view some happening and sometimes instead of helping they cause more chaos.

Older folk do sometimes suffer from forgetfulness or even dementia; they can do odd things at times.
It is a story with a good plot and could even develop into a great story.

You must continue.
Do not stop your story here.
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Review by Cristina
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Such a beautiful story of hope, very simple yet contains a powerful message.

Animals are indeed so important to us all.




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Review of Lovely Day  
Review by Cristina
Rated: ASR | (3.0)
I totally agree.
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Review of I want to be...  
Review by Cristina
Rated: E | (4.5)
What an amazing poem.

Yes, being a mother requires so much of us.

Good verses, well written .
Brings about a sense of homeliness and the purpose of being a mother.

I loved my mum, and although she has departed, she is always in my thoughts, now I am a mother too, I have a most wonderful son, my pride and joy.
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Review of Story of my life  
Review by Cristina
Rated: E | (3.0)
We all like freedom.
You have made the right choice.

Try and create paragraphs when you are writing and make use of “ figures of speech” to enhance your writing.
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Review of Easier To Bear  
Review by Cristina
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very sweet.
Very sensible and good advice to anyone who finds himself or herself in a less than happy mood.

A simple message of hope, to anyone considering violence or acts of violence against others. Life is precious, it should be respected.
It is an extraordinary gift.
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Review of The Act  
Review by Cristina
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
An interesting piece of writing.

Is this written from previous experiences or from a fictional point of view?

However, it makes us realize that we are futile and arrogant sometimes in thinking that everything is going to be okay, when in fact the contrary could happen.

Forgiveness is very much an “ act” of our will.
If we forgive, we liberate the other as well as ourself.
It requires much courage and a great love for oneself.

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Review of Lady Bugs  
Review by Cristina
Rated: E | (4.0)
An interesting way of looking at a lady bug.
They are beautiful creatures and the fascination of many children that come across these tiny creatures.

Adults also enjoy looking at them.
Lady bugs embellish any garden.

Good rhyming, interesting play on words:” I wonder if his spots will fade too?” invokes a great sense of expectation and wonder.


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Review by Cristina
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Beautiful piece of writing.

Very simple yet containing an interesting story.

The two characters fill up the entire space and the woman being the most important character lives an extremely simple existence along with her child, yet in a complete blissful scenery.

The loneliness and isolation of the characters is highlighted in the text “ in the depths of winter solitude”.

I enjoyed reading this piece.
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Review of Purple Plush  
Review by Cristina
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very sweet and full of imagery.
Contains various states of “feeling” and “moods”.
A lot of imagery and a great play on words.
I enjoyed reading it.
Good use of rhyme.
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Review by Cristina
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Quite impressive, this poem contains a lot of information.

It is not so easy to follow or understand, as it contains many metaphors and a lot of imagery.
A lot of alliteration as well.

I would suggest that it is about the sea or swimming
in the sea, as “salted water” , “ ocean bed” and “ sea” are mentioned.

Contains many lines and the verses are quite long.
However, it allows one to go through it more than once to grasp the true meaning and message intended.
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Review by Cristina
Rated: E | (4.0)
Some of us have had such experiences.
It is quite daunting to understand that someone has been inside your house or property trying to take something that does not belong to them.
The story is descriptive of the thieves and their act of robbery.
The reaction of the farmer when confronting the robbers is peaceful but firm as well.
It highlights the robbers’ sense of shame.
A good piece of writing.
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Review by Cristina
Rated: E | (4.0)
1)The institute for thought and perception
2)The academy if inertia and momentum
3)Mind storm
4) Momentums
5) Mysterium
6) Dimensionopolis
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