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Review by C.N.Delo Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ ★★★★★ | (3.5)
I enjoyed this. Though, when Davis hides in the hallway as George is entering, I was confused. Davis smirks and suddenly George sees him? It just wasn't quite clear. Also, I thought George jumped to conclusions pretty quickly for a man with a gun in his face. I would have had him ask a few more clarifying questions, but that's just me. I loved your last sentence and thought it was the perfect way to end it. The beginning paragraph was also good. It hooked me in, revealed something about the character, the frost description was perfect, and it got me asking questions. Overall, well done.
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