This was very well done. I felt like you could've added a little bit in there to make it more..."hot"... (just my preference) but all in all it was very well written. I definetely enjoyed reading.
Wow. Most of my family is military so this really hit home, but in a good way. I used to think the same thing as the character here. I joined the army as well, but realized you don't always have to do something daring to be a hero. You don't have to have super powers or always kill the bad guy. People view heroes in a different ways. The line "They came home just like me but without an arm or more. These are true heroes of, a god forsaken war." had me crying. Tears were in my eyes because it resonated so much in me. Really amazing job. I will definitely read more of your works.
Oh, goodness. That was pretty heart-wrenching and dark. But all of it was amazing. When you were describing the different body parts that was leaving her and why...I was taken aback. Everything in this makes you want to cry for that girl. This is wonderfully written! I am very glad I gave this a chance.
...wow. That was amazing. I was sucked in after just the first few lines. I am very happy I chose to read this story. Vivianca was a great character and so was Shariel. The description of details made me picture everything very clearly in my head. The way you portrayed the relationships between heaven and hell, and the demons and angels, was very well written and easy to understand. Kept me at the edge of my seat to, hoping somehow they could both be saved. This was an amazing read!
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