This is an excellent poem. I always look forward to reading works of nightmarish monsters and you certainly brought that forward. From the very beginning there is a sense of panic that I think everyone finds themselves in when they do something they should not have done. As a story writer I can't help but sit here and think of the different directions this could go.
Thank you for the experience.
This was awesome. I always joke around and say things like "Pay no attention to the man behind the curtain." and "These are not the droids you are looking for." when I am talking about our government. I think we like to get our information from the television and forget that rich people help rich people stay rich. If our government wanted to pass bills to help they would. By doing so they would lose money. No one likes to lose money. Good rant. :)
This was an excellent read. I wanted to write something along the lines of- would this girl be able to mentally be able to handle a lot of haunts coming at her all the time? Don't you think she would go crazy in the long run?- but great authors have a tendency to make you ask questions and then in the end bring it all together in one fell swoop. You did this here and it was an awesome ride. I can't wait to read more.
This was a well flowing work that helped make your point without causing any confusion. Sometimes people like to hide their political and environmental beliefs making it scant to find. You certainly did not do that. You are very good at what you do and I can't wait to read more.
I loved this from beginning to end. I have personally struggled with life many times. I have even more so almost drowned more than once while growing up. You hit the nail on the head in both cases. Life sometimes does feel like you are drowning and there is no escape. More so drowning feels like drowning with no escape. You amazingly described both of them with perfection. This was a great read.
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