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Review of Empty Chair  
Review by n dru
Rated: E | (1.5)
Rated it "1.5", and quite frankly that was being generous, and solely due to the idea behind it.

The idea was fine, but the execution was horrible. The repetition does it no favours.

Filler words: 'to, the, we, this, and, those, in, it, not, they'

'sit' is said four times, it has vague language - sounds like a six year old or someone who doesn't speak English fluently wrote it. It seems like a crappy version of a proverb that goes on for four stanzas longer than it should do.

Good idea, however i think you tried too hard to appear smart, and failed.
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