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Review of Hard to breathe  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I like the moment in time assasination. It's gripping. It sends my imagination running about where they are and what precipitated it. Was it random? A mugging? Premeditated? Probably in a city if he didn't see the blow coming. Maybe his predator was hiding in the shadows. In an alley? Maybe the victim owns a seedy business and was leaving the backdoor?

The last line feels a little strangely punctuated. The phrase "he whispers my name night" is hard to parse what you meant.

I expect it to be more like:

He whispers my name. Night, night little buggy.
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