this could be a lot of girls' story. I have friends like that even today and I am well past school age:) friends are great even when they drive us nuts sometimes.
Beauty and The Beast? ugly he starts out to be but beauty within sets him free? I agree fairytales are just that. in the real world we shouldn't judge on the outside but we are conditioned to at a very early age .. look at Barbie and Ken.. maybe they should make an ugly Barbie then we could buy a plastic surgery barbie to fix her. LOL now that may actually have possibiltiy hmmmmm...
this poem is about self discovery, or the fear of self discovery. it is easier to hide behind what people expect us to be than to shed the costume and be our natural , secret self. you do not fit within the mold, your thoughts, emotions are different but you are ashamed and so you hide and become nothing. this is a very reflective look at oneself from within. nothingness is a very powerful word. i like this.
the rule is never make eye contact:) I know this feeling when someone wants to bend your ear. i was a bartender so i do know what it is like to hear people's stories. unfortunately they are usually drunk so the story is a bit ... one sided usually in their favor. it is comical though at times and sad. having to go to a bar to get people to listen to you is depressing. this is a good start to a story, you could really go crazy with some odd characters and enthralling stories.
this is a vey dark poem. It makes me sad. It is very poignant and blunt. I hope if this is your experience you know there is always someone who cares. I care. life is precious even though it sucks at times. we've all been there. people would notice.
short and sweet and to the point. makes you question without bogging us down. This is a very good observation. nice flow. I like your line about beauty and i like your choice of words.
surprise ending there:) this is a story about faith and trusting God? that is what i got out out it. plus a moral: always listen to your mother she does know best:) what trouble we find ourselves in when we listen to temptation. and what about control i find this in your story as well, the inability to give control over by asking for help. i liked this , the ending was sad though but definately a twist.
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