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11 Public Reviews Given
Review Style
Find what is good with your writing and praise it. But I will point out the bad and give you advice on how to fix it. I will take my time on my reviews and take time out of my day to enjoy the wonderful stories you send me.
I'm good at...
Grammar errors, verb tenses, confusing things, plot inconsistencies.
Favorite Genres
Action/Adventure Fantasy Thrillers/Horror
Least Favorite Genres
Romance and erotica
Favorite Item Types
Chapters Short Stories
Least Favorite Item Types
Poems, Books, Screenplays
I will not review...
Anything too inappropriate or religious I'm not that kind of guy. Also, nothing super political I'm trying to relax here!
Public Reviews
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Review by Trenton Thomas
Rated: E | (3.0)
Interesting. I found these thoughts intriguing but maybe make them a little more understandable with proper capitalization and maybe find a way to show it's a new thought.

Happy Writing!
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Review of Missing Samantha  
Review by Trenton Thomas
Rated: E | (4.0)
This story is absolutely WONDERFUL!
The emotion and descriptions are very well done.
I'm not the greatest at pointing out lots of errors but some periods could be replaced with commas to make a better flow but you do you. Great job and keep up your astonishing storytelling!

Happy Writing!
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Review by Trenton Thomas
Rated: E | (4.0)
Poems aren't my area of expertise but every once and awhile I stumble across something like this and I think, "Wow! This is really good!"
My one critique is maybe find a different word like maybe favor instead of the second flavor but what would I know.
Great job! I look forward to seeing more work from you in the future.

Happy Writing!
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Review by Trenton Thomas
Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
Hi! I kind of liked this story.
First off I think the sentence, "There was no sound; a sensation of air rushing, simultaneously ripping me apart and holding me together" would flow better as 'There was no sound. A sensation of air, simultaneously ripping me apart and holding me together, rushing past.' Just an idea.
Secondly, "It went on forever, and was over in an instant." is very paradoxical and slightly confusing at least for me. Maybe, 'It felt like forever but it was over in an instant.'
Finally, in one of the sentences, you are missing the beginning quotation mark.
All in all not my kind of story but it was pretty good. Fix those things and you got a pretty good story.
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Review of Same colors  
Review by Trenton Thomas
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I really connected with this piece and I really loved it.
I hope you are happier and don't have thoughts like that anymore.

I'm not an expert poet but maybe some commas and periods for continuations and ends of lines.

Happy Writing!
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Review by Trenton Thomas
Rated: E | (3.5)
Thrilling. Had me hooked on the first line!
Some points to work on though,
Make sure to start new lines for dialogue and after 3-5 sentences depending on what's happening.
I'm not great at this either but I always take it into consideration, Show Don't Tell.
The ending was great and I loved this story so much. I would totally read this if it was a book!

Happy Writing!
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Review of Forget Me Not  
Review by Trenton Thomas
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
No. I love this poem and I don't normally review them but this one really caught my eye.

I wish there was more. It tells a whole story with a little number of words. I hope to see more of your work soon.

Happy Writing!
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Review by Trenton Thomas
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I liked this Short Story! Here are some critiques!
"This creates unbreakable friendships, and horrifically godless enemies." Remove the comma.

The description doesn't really match the story so this is confusing for me. Some more elaboration would be helpful.

Happy writing!
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Review of Woodchester  
Review by Trenton Thomas
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi! I'm Trenton and I really enjoyed this short story!
First thing, I like the use of description for the doorframe but I would've liked some more description for the interior as well.
Second thing, I liked the ending but it was a little confusing. What happened to him? Where were they transported?
Third thing, make sure that there are hyphens between worm-eaten and half-finished.
Other than that it was great!

Happy Writing!
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