THE LORD JESUS is so AWESOME. I have often found myself in the perils of storms and mind battles, and admittedly sometimes by my own hand. YET JESUS, instead of wrath showed and continues to show mercy. I don't know why but I am eternally grateful. This is a perfect piece.
I like the whole theme of the work altogether. It is very good and I enjoyed the read. Though in my humble opinion, I think it would read better if loneliness were personified as some dark figure here. It would just bring the piece more to life, that is lowly opinion. "Just wants to witness your dissent, without love." My favourite part.
Yeah... Short and depressing. The tone, the style and length are just so right. Though the fourth line throws off the rhythm a bit, still very nicely written. I don't know how with words so written, anyone could ever forget the name Taryn Sloane. Honestly... I should like to read more of your writings.
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