|The scope here is impressive and you clearly have worked out the world you are writing about. It is not something familiar with and have never been an avid gamer.
Two things I feel safe to say:
1. References to "whores" etc - obviously language can be in context and not taken as prejudice but I think there are limits and sometimes it sounds derogatory, especially when it comes from her Husband.
2. A lot of exposition and details sometimes which feels to much like "tell" and not enough about "show". Take "Roland watched the couple walk away, disappointed to see his entertainment go but also relieved that temptation was gone." Rather than saying he is disappointed, is there a way of showing this, e.g. Roland watched the couple walk away, breathing a sigh of relief."
Just my thoughts, not a world I know or understand but would be great to see how this develops.