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Review by drboris
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
Hullo Brin,

I just read "The phantom jogger", and I had a thought or two.

I have worked security for 17 years, doing rotating shifts, I know what you mean about night workers all having a "spooky" story or two.

I enjoyed reading your story, but if I had done the piece, I might have added some close up spooky details and tried to turn it into a bigger story. For example, when you were trying to "catch" the jogger. But that's just me.

I especially liked your ending, it shows you aren't afraid to poke some fun at yourself.

Keep the good yarns coming,

Drboris

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Review of Anna  
Review by drboris
Rated: | (4.0)
Hullo American train wreck,

I just read of Anna. I have to make the disclaimer that I don't know the first thing about poetry, but I did enjoy your images of the birds in the morning hours, and the beauty of someone you love.

Regards,

drboris
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Review of Why?  
Review by drboris
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hullo Rue-bee,

I am sending you this review as part of the judging process for "A fall romance contest". Congratulations on your first place, by the way!

In your piece "Why?", you created a very real setting for me as the reader. What I particularly liked was that you did this without bombarding me with description and physical details. In fact, I think I can only recall a couple of instances of physical description in the entire in the entire piece.

I picked that Ben was a ghost (or memory) fairly early in the piece, but that doesnt detract from the story in anyway.

The small amount of dialogue you used was sufficiently "sappy" and at the same time "real", in that it read and flowed well, while sounding like an actual conversation.

As for spelling, grammar and such, I really couldn't see anything glaring out at me, thats a good thing.

Regards,

doc

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Review by drboris
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hullo Jr old boy,

I read "Rainbows and Lollipops" last night, and I think it fits your description of fairy tale.

Your writitng style is an excellent fit for this kind of "tale". I could easily imagine the narrators voice.

I particularly liked your owl character. You gave him a "wonderland" style of being without letting him get cartoonish

Your grammar and punctuation looked pretty good to me, but then I am not exaclty an expert in that field. as you know.

If I have any issues with the piece, it would be the conversation between the sisters at the beginning. It showed the difference between the attitudes of the sisters well enough, but there was something I couldnt put my finger on. Again that could just be me.

Bear in mind that this is all just my opinion, and you should take it or leave it as you see fit.

Regards,

doc
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Review of Our Family Secret  
Review by drboris
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hullo aralls,

I wish I had a talking dog like yours, though both of them would swear a lot I think.

I loved the way you just had the dog start talking, no trying to explain it with science experiments or spells gone wrong. You made him a very likable character, though what dog isnt?

Hopefully we'll see more of Joe the well read talking German Shepherd in future adventures.

Regards,

drboris

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Review of An Intruder Calls  
Review by drboris
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hullo Mark C,

This piece was recommended to me by a good friend, and I am glad they did. I really enjoyed the story. The idea of guilt as a stalker worked really well for me, well done.

The conversation between the main character and his "stalker" kept me hooked all the way through to the twist in the tail. Even though I had a bit of an inkling it was going to happen, I was not disappointed when it came.

A great read, I'll be reading some more soon.

Regards,

drboris

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