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Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
A great contest, keep it going.
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Review of Trail Of Tears  
Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
I was hopscotching through your library and zeroed in on this. Something that should be taught in every school, but it won.t be. They' ed rather keep it swept under the rug. This is a good nutshell of what happened and about all, any reader will stay interested in. It's a shame, there are some good books out there, that give a better understanding of what really happened. I found them to be what I call...dry reading, but when you finish, you have a better understanding and see Andrew Jackson for what he really was.

Circuit Rider
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Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I read this through twice. You might add it goes back to the beginning. We are a product of our environment from the day we are born to this minute in time. Our own foundation will usually influence our place in life. We are like sponges absorbing everything around us. Unless we have the proper guidance and teachings, we will trust in our own learning, which more often than not, is provided by people pushing their own agenda.

We can only survive by keeping our faith in God, and still, we may not survive. Because you cannot fix stupid.
But you cannot blame it all on stupid. A lot of the wrongnesses are orchestrated in the beginning by people of power and money.

Circuit Rider

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Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
To say this is a great story would be an understatement. I totally enjoyed it; it flowed with feelings. Don't throw that pen away, it has magic in it.

Circuit Rider
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Review of Jesus Was Human!  
Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I enjoyed reading this piece, very thought-provoking. Especially, the last two paragraphs. We might actually achieve this 'power' if we could ever learn how to let go of our own self-doubts.

Keep up the good work, Circuit Rider

P.S. I'm not a proofreader and my fingers miss the keys too, but I think you meant [body odor, not, body order]
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for entry "The Old House
Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
If you heard footsteps in your attic, it's me jumping from one story to another. I stopped at this one to take a breath and maybe retain some of the knowledge I have gleaned from your beautiful garden. Purely as a learning tool on my part as I am short on the literary teachings of the world. I was so engrossed in this story, I was at the end before I knew it. The anticipation builds, then sadness, because there is no more.
May you have a good day. REJ
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Review of Big UFO News  
Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello, up in Montana
I liked your story, it's almost believable, well almost. Then, I went on to read the rest of your stories. I liked all of them. They have a different tone to them. I can almost see an old cowboy sitting around a campfire spinning a yarn beneath a star lite sky.

I was stationed at Glasgow Airforce base back in 1963 and 1964 and enjoyed my stay there. Me and another guy from Cookeville, Tn. were probably the only guys not trying to transfer somewhere else. We enjoyed hunting, fishing, and exploring old ghost towns, but the good times didn't last as we were transferred to Vietnam.
If you enjoy stories that have a comical side to them, you can find some in my folder... Stories from the front porch swing.
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Review of Date Killer  
Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
This is a good story. It flows so nicely you are the end before you realize it, and the ending is fitting. As for punctuation and spelling, that is not on my checklist, as I wouldn't know if something was right or wrong. You would have to spell 'look' with three o's before I would catch it. Therefore I just go with the overall content.

On another note, I am surprised this story hasn't been reviewed before. It is definitely deserving of some good comments. I have one of my stories I was proud of, but it wasn't getting any attention until I changed the title, then it took off. Just something to think about.
Thanks for sharing. REJ
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Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
I like your human interest story. Even though it's marked fiction, how do we know it's not. It brings to surface a memory each of us carries. We each know where we were at and what we were doing when the world stopped turning. I think your story should have placed, but that is just my humble opinion.
I found your story on 'The second chance entry'. I thought about entering, but you are still up against the best and all categories are poured in the same bucket. It's like comparing a ww1 twin wing Forker airplane to a sleek fighter jet. The jet will win the race, but the Forker has character and its own beauty.

Thanks for sharing. I enjoyed the ride. And good luck. REJ
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Review of Adventures at Sea  
Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: E | (5.0)
Your story was a joy to read; it reminded me of my Dad going over the firing procedures for the 16-inch guns on the USS Missouri during WW11. He retired after 30-years with the Navy. He never talked much about the battles, but would talk about life aboard ship.

Keep the memories flowing. REJ
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Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: E | (4.0)
I read this because I wanted to see where you were going with this. The title conjures up a lot of possibilities for the outcome. Bravo on your ending. I am all in favor of happy endings. I can't comment on the technical stuff as I was the last in my class on that stuff. So, will go with overall impact. Which I thought was very good.

May the rest of your day be the same. REJ
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Review of Child's Morph  
Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: E | (4.0)
Doc, I liked that. I can't say if it's good poetry or not since I'm not into writing poetry.So, I'll just stick with overall content. It took me back in years.I liked the line 'Thank me for my service. Do they know what I’ve done?'
I might have added, they don't have a clue about what I've done. Nixion's war still haunts me today.

Keep up the good work. You might like my story 'The countdown, going home'.
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Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: E | (5.0)
A super piece, but the facts will be ignored by the majority. I don't think we have fifty years. The country is no longer unified as a whole, different ungodly fractions are pulling it apart. What many think of as the progressiveness of the human race is actually the slow backing up of the sewers?
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Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: E | (5.0)
I had to walk away after reading this. It hit me like a ton of bricks. While looking for one answer, I found the answer to another question. A question which had been plaguing me for the last few years. We all strive to grasp the brass ring and want something other than he or she ‘Was Here’ on our headstone. I see now that it’s not all that important to find what is on the other side of the mountain and leave your mark upon the earth, it’s all about how the journey in between.

Thank you.

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Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm not here for the points, just to say Hi, and I like what you wrote. Now, I will rummage around some more.
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for entry "Aliens are Here!
Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
A good thought keeping newsletter. the only thing missing is the escaped criminals, 'The Clinton gang' who jumped off a time-ship on the way to prison. Now, they cain't get their uranium back from Russia to refuel there escape pod.

Just messing with you. Really enjoyed the piece as it covered a lot of territories I never thought about. Keep up the good work.
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Review of I See You  
Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Now, I’m wondering what she will see before I get to the end of the story. The dark places of my mind throw out endless possibilities and I stay away from the dark side, real life is scary enough. I probably would have gone with her seeing an 18-year-old girl, then the next time a 10-year-old girl then the neighbors finding a baby on the floor.
Good story, I picked out more of what I need to concentrate on than anything else and that is filling in between the dialog.
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Review of The Sniper  
Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Misleading, misleading, misleading. Way to go. I can't stay under that kind of word count. 2000 words maybe and then it takes me a month to write a short story and another three months of rewrites. This story is a compact story with an old theme, but you slammed it right out of the park.

Your fellow associate, R.E. Jones
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Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I doubt I could say anything that you haven't heard before, it would just be an echo of encouraging words.So I'll give it five stars since it was a piece I could not put down until I finished reading it.

Like the early pioneers, our own fathers became the men of the times, just doing what needed to be done. My own father born in 1916 served and retired from the Navy. He trained on one of the last sailing ships the nave had. I always thought that was fascinating and wished I had paid closer attention to his stories. Now they're just bits and pieces.

Keep following your dream. You have it all together.

R. E. Jones
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Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: E | (4.0)
Don't know if this is where I'm supposed to be or not, but here it is and some may not want to read it, but they should before it's too late.

Once upon a time there was a country divided amongst its self. Every day, the people poked at old wounds and delighted in their newly gained dark desires and branded those who opposed them. One day, the good people tried to restore morality to the land, but they had waited too long. Because of that, sexism, drugs, corruption, greed and self-pleasures fueled the train of self-destruction. Until finally, the armies of the world walked upon the shores without raising a sword.
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Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: E | (5.0)
All I can say is, or I should ask. When do you have the time, but I'm glad that you do. It may be just the thing that someone out there needed.
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Review of 2017 Humanity  
Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: E | (4.0)
A very thought provoking piece. It could very well fit the Vietnam war when people threw rocks at our bus' when we came home and spat at us from behind police lines like we were the ones that made the policies. Your last line 'one Nation under God, if he truly was in everyone's heart there would be no need to write this piece. Wouldn't that be grand?
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Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
How I wound up here, is now a mystery to me, but I'm glad I ended up here. I remember passing past a least two dozen poems, a couple of pink unicorns and one monkey riding a dragon.Not that I'm picky, but I guess I am as I'm passed the balloons and lolly pop stages a long time ago. I enjoy true family stories and write a few myself, but mine are on the comical side. I think this is the first time I have ever read about a missing body part, I do hope the fellow was able to use it later.

I read parts of your 'End time story' and know you're still working on it. I liked parts of what I read, but I think a bit of research would help you come across in a more reality setting, man kind will be at their best and evil people will be at their worse.
I'm just an old coot filling in the hours of the day and my opinions aren't going to bake anybody's bread; so you have a good day and keep writing.
R.E.Jones



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Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Your writing I can understand, it's real. It pulls you in.
I have never been much for poetry, dragons, pink unicorns or the dark side. I will cut this short. I didn't come over here for the points, but just to check in and it's good.
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Review by Circuit Rider
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I hope you have pitched this story to some Youth magazines and church publications
because that is where it needs to be. This is a very good story.
Too many young people feel they have no one to turn to. It is sad we live in a world that this has become almost commonplace in some form. Over the last two weeks, charges were brought against three teachers here in Tenn. and children are reported missing every week.

Keep up the good work, Ronnie Jones

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