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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I feel like it's too scattered. Like the author has so many great ideas that they want to put them all in the same story. There is no real dramatic climax because all of the killings are equally important. Try Picking one major event, then going off of that, making that your climax, also try to include some dialog. I really liked the part in the beginning, how he is stopping the robbers then he is all calm (the ultimate action hero persona) And is talking like he just didn't do anything. Keep writing this has potential.
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Review of The detective  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Love... it...! It has great detail and a great ending. I personally love a great cliff hanger with a part 2. Just think about it with your skill, I would read it... The detective part 2: ____________
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Rated: 13+
this is beyond my understand, it is so deep. You have to read it 3 times to at least to get some meaning from the words. Keep writing!
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