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Review of Shadows  
Review by Qoheleth
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is zhe actually pretty good. It could have been longer and made scarier! Like realizing that there was no darkness and the character is actually insane... Or something scary like that...
Either zhe way... Zhe good poem..
Review of Time  
Review by Qoheleth
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
And so our hero is greeted by this strange riddle by mistermavin96 who then solves it himself and says
it's time! Time is invaluable and you can't get it back!"
And our hero says
"Time may be invaluable. But it's how you perceive it that changes the whole game. If you perceive it in a more better way then you'll even slow it down or travel back... After all time is relative.. "
Yeah but it took some seconds to narrate this mr. Hero, and this is precious time I, the omniscient narrator will never get back. So I declare you wrong.
"Even if you waste time, it's still you who decide it has been a waste. You make sense of your surroundings, nobody does it for you."
Mr. Hero, you're really wasting our time here.
Mistermavin96 your little writing here is actually pretty good. I would add some dark superhero monologue do make it really dark ya know.
But then again I'm a newbie to this site!
Review by Qoheleth
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Qoheleth: See, I've been requested to review this for some reason. I'm still new to this site so I have no clue what's going on...
A mysterious voice: then review the story.
Qoheleth: I guess you're right.
The voice :Do it already!
Qoheleth: Okay, okay...
Even I shall review this piece. The story was fun. The characters were interesting.
What shall be its end I wonder?
But this situation is awkward... Are requests made by the authors themselves?
If so.. This is awkward indeed!
Yet I thank you for this read...
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