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Review by Gabrielle K.D Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
This was very good and I enjoyed it. You say this is chapter one? This was nice, but i believe it would work better somewhere else, maybe deeper in the story? maybe he shouldn't ask so many questions so early on? just suggestions. It sounds like a story I would like to read. Keep up the good work! :)
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