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Review by GeorgeWDeMuth
Rated: E | (5.0)
This article is well researched and well organized. It should be more widely read. Perhaps you should consider putting it into one of the plug pages. But if you do, be prepared. You will not like all of them. You will sometimes wonder if the reviewer's bag of marbles is completely full. Nonetheless, I think a mixture of reviews is better than none at all, and it would be a good thing for your article to be seen.
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Review of My Philosophy  
Review by GeorgeWDeMuth
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Aardvark - I'm struggling a little here as I just had eye surgery. I find nothing to disagree with. Number seven is fascinating as it could be interpreted in so many ways. For example, turning argument into discussion can slowly lead back to argument, which may be no more productive than the first argument. There may be an underflow of hostility covered by what seems to pass for civilized discussion on the surface. What you meant is important but more importantly is the questions it leads to and how suppositions stand the test of time, I think. It was a fascinating statement. I'm sure one skilled in rhetoric would have a field day with seven whith out disagreeing with the original statemement.

12. As for the good old days, I just think about a root canal without anesthesiea. Or an extraction in which one tooth root is not only infected, but curved, so it had to be dug out. I've heard the pain issue was dealt with by loud music; so no one could hear the patient. A practical point only, perhaps, but I need to get to bed and havent time to talk about legal systems only Adolf Hitler could imagine. Oh, and some time ago I dated a girl who spent her early years in an 'internment' facility born an American citizen, a child and basically locked up. Who could blame Mr. Roosevelt? Times were tough.

14. A cursory reading of the Old Testament reveals that God, in whom I believe, never does things the easy way. He could have sent the living baby Jesus to Mary, already weaned and accompanied by Seraphim. Did he? Read. It's in the Book. And department stores.
Would he be satisfied with zap, there's a world, zap, theres animals, zap theres people and dinasours and pterodactyls, etc. Note the detail of DNA and mitochondrial RNA he went into in those first few chapters. No, I believe everything comes from God, but for some reason he likes to sit around and whatch it all develop. And why not? What else has he got to do? Go to meical school and study anatomy? You disagree? If I were a lawyer ( now there's a system I'll bet he gets a kick out of), would I point to Job, or the fatted calf guy, Moses in the bullrushes, the list goes on and on. Who wrote the first few chapters of Genesis anyway. Sure were a lotta begats after that, and no one had word processors, then, I think.

Anyway, I think you have arrived at the wisdom a mature sensible person should have obtained. I give you a 6. Or is it 5. I need to get some sleep.
Georgiawill
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Review by GeorgeWDeMuth
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a good Haiku but now as strong as others you have written. The lines just don't have the 'punch' such as 'twig by twig', 'nest abandoned' 'one by one',' silent cry of heart'. Those lines have a power and appeal I don't find in this Haiku. Yet, it is a good one. Although there may not be the power or appeal in any one line, taken as a whole the Haiku describes part of the life cycle of a tree as commanded by natures law, not the whim of the tree, and the fact that a love bond still exists between tree and leaf. At least that is my view, and since this is a Haiku and I am a co-creator of the poem, it must be respected as valid. I think it is a positive interpretation, by the way.
I would have liked to see a stronger third line, stated in the active voice, stating the love bond that still exists. I realize that is a tall order. I hate to do this, as I hate it when reviewers do it to me; it seems like meddling, but this poor poet is going to offer an unworthy example of what I am trying to say. I realize it may not be good enough, but it may say more than 'something in the active voice.' - 'Trees and leaves still love.'- Of course this may bear no resemblance to the path down which you wished to lead us, and therefor seem irrelevant. I just think something active like that would give the last line more power, and hence the Haiku more power. Using a three syllable word in a five syllable line is very limiting.
Respectfully
Georgiawill
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Review by GeorgeWDeMuth
Rated: E | (5.0)
The first line is excellent. It uses the device of repetition to describe, almost re-create the process of the leaves falling. The second line gave me some problems, but I believe some trees, perhaps the crepe Myrtle may reproduce by falling leaves, so that is the way I choose to read this poem, which gives it strength. Silent cry of heart is a wonderful line. It is a perfect last line.
The syllable count is correct in all three lines. The flow is perfect, no jerkiness. Making the assumption that there are trees that reproduce through propagation of their leaves, and I am sure there are, this Haiku deserves a five.
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Review of Let My People Go  
Review by GeorgeWDeMuth
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed reading this story. It reminds me of stories I was told when I was a child. I think I learned more about people in the Bible from those stories or cartoon type stories than any reading I have done. The dialog between all the people in this story made it come to life. The dialog was captivating and well handled. An illustrated collection of such stories would be a winner. I'd probably buy one for my nephews and read it myself!
Please keep on writing these stories. I think they are great.
Georgiawill
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Review of Animals  
Review by GeorgeWDeMuth
Rated: E | (5.0)
I think this is a very clever and appropriate puzzle, especially for people who are just starting to do them. I wonder if most people think of the work involved in getting the verticals and horizontals to come out correctly. I may be wrong, but I don't think so. It seems to me this involved a lot of work, and a lot of brain power, especially to make it come out doable for someone who has not been doing the NY Times crosswords for 30 years. Which I, for one, have not. Thank you for giving me something I can do. I look forward to working on it.
Georgiawill
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Review of FIRST LOVE  
Review by GeorgeWDeMuth
Rated: E | (5.0)
I'm not experienced enough to give a structured, well informed review, but it did make me think of my experience. The stanza that I thought was absolutely wonderful was the next to the last. That was the one that touched me. That stanza rated a 10 star so I figured you deserved a 5 for the entire poem. I'm going to print it out.
Georgiawill
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Review of another hiku  
Review by GeorgeWDeMuth
Rated: E | (3.5)
I liked the last two lines a lot. They 'rang true', so to speak. They took me to the woods and made me feel the quieting reverberations that always follow when the woodpecker stops. It is a fine silence, and I think you captured it very well.

Perhaps it is my failing, but I could not feelingly connect the first line with the second two. Perhaps on further meditation I'd have gotten it. I'd have liked something like 'The deep empty woods.' Turns the woods on it's head, not reality but a feeling state. Somehow resonate with last two lines, but not same meaning. Haiku made me think. Thanks.
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