|This is extremely good. Stories that address coming out are very difficult to write and often end up awkward or cliche, and this story has none of those problems. It is well-written, intelligent, emotional, and compelling.
OK... on with the details
Title - The title is based on the main metaphor of the story: confusing at first but leads to a great "aha" feeling when the reader discovers its meaning.
Character/s - Your main character is very honest and very real
Plot - The plot is presented as several "snapshots scenes" over the course of a childhood with "fast-forward" cuts in between that create a nice arc.
What I liked: *CheckV*.
Your descriptions, especially in the first half of the piece, are very vivid and very detailed, and very enjoyable to read. I really felt "in" the scene. Your prose is very intelligent, and the analogy with life being like a Russian novel is both hilarious and very insightful.
I also enjoyed your insight, from the younger child's perspective, seeing the older gay couple as "flawed" and not living up to the "fairy tale." You do a good job of making the child's view feel very honest.
As you "fast forward" through other elements, I get a real sense of how the maturing character is having to deal with these issues and how that affects the lens that he uses to see the world.
Errors and suggestions: *XV*.
I would like this to be a little longer. The first segment of story is the most detailed, and it sets the stage very well. Then you fast-forward through several other moments: the first kiss, the actual coming out. These seem like they are not as detailed or vivid. I would like to see more description. Some of it comes out in later sections (e.g. the detail of hiding behind the pillow is endearing and really conveys feeling), but I think you could commit to more, in both the coming out story and the in-between "kiss" segment.
There are a couple of places where the language is a little overly-formal, and in some places it borders on being incorrect. So go through and I would recommend reading it out loud to yourself. If it feels awkward to say out loud, you may want to simplify the writing. For example, you say, "about 200 pages later, I am found lying in a dorm room....". You don't really mean "am found", I think, right? You mean "I found myself....". Nobody in the story has found you there, I think?
But these are small details. In an excellent story, my main suggestion is to add more to it!